This is for the weekly Indie Ink writing challenge. This week I was challenged by an extremely talented writer alyssa at alyssagoesbang. I have to admit I cheated just a teensy bit on this challenge. The challenge was to look to my LEFT and write about the first blue thing I saw, but to my left is a wall that is painted completely WHITE with nothing blue on it whatsoever. So I looked to my RIGHT and saw well something blue. I am not telling what because I don't want to spoil the surprise. The story below is fiction but it is based on a real event. Only the names have been changed to protect the innocent and the guilty. These are their stories. Oh and I challenged Andrea. You'll be able to read her reply there."
PS I am trying to use dialogue which I am pretty weak at using so any tips, feedback, suggestions are most welcomed.
Psht! Psshht! Psshht!
"Where did he go? Do you see him?" I asked Shane, who by now is doubled over laughing so hard tears are streaming down his face.
"He ran in the other room", he manages to blurt out in between fits of laughter.
"I cannot believe he did this again. I swear he does it just to piss me off. He knows he isn't allowed in there so why does he keep doing it?"
I put the can down and begin picking up the panties that Uncle Fez had scattered about the room. "Stupid idiot", I mutter as I pick up the last of them and put them back in the drawer. "I swear if he does this again, I am going to do more than get the can after him."
"Awww, Nina. Don't be so hard on him. It's not a big deal,".
"Not a big deal?! I'd like to see how you would react if it were your underwear he kept trying on instead of mine."
"You're just jealous that he looks better in them than you do".
"Oh really! Well for your information, that pair he had on just now? I just bought those today and was planning on surprising you later. Guess which one of you WON'T be getting in my panties today?"
Just as I turn to walk out of the room, Uncle Fez runs passed me, headed straight for my panties drawer.
I grab the can off the dresser.Psht! Psht! Terrified, Uncle Fez runs between Shane and me, and disappears into the guest room down the hall.
"He did it again, and right in front of me this time!" I scream at Shane, "Will you do something? Please? He's more afraid of you than he is me. Besides, aren't you a little jealous he gets in my panties more than you do?"
"Ok! Ok! Give me the can. I will go see if I can get him to give them back.".
As Shane takes the can out of my hand, I kiss him lightly on the cheek. "My hero," I say in my most southern accent. He rolls his eyes and then starts to laugh again."I never in my whole life saw a cat so afraid of a can of air freshener before," he says as he walks down the hall towards the guest room where the extremely naughty Uncle Fez is hiding and protectively guarding the latest addition to his prized Victoria's Secret panty collection .
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